Dangers of 5G network – ENC 1101

You are editing file attached, name MY WORK. Pleas follow the rubric, to make sure it meets the first column of 20 point creteria.

Got a 89.17% because of sentence structure. Can you update please so that I can get an A and I can rate 5 stars.

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DROPBOX FEEDBACK
This is an excellent argument, and it is indeed persuasive. Well done. Both body points are wonderfully explored with the first having a bit deeper analysis than the second.

Otherwise, there is a strange paragraph sitting between the second body point and the conclusion. Since the essay is supposed to be four (4) paragraphs and It does not add any value to the argument, go ahead and delete.

Then, your organization score will improve. Easy “A.” Look over the scored rubric and ask me any questions. You are welcome to revise so long as you HIGHLIGHT the changes, so I can see clearly.

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Dangers of Fifth-Generation Network (5G)
Cell phone technology has evolved over the years and customers are getting more excited as wireless carriers make every effort to provide them with the fastest internet speeds on their devices. Customers watched the network grow G by G from 1G (Edge), to 2G, then to 3G, then to 4G, and then to 4G LTE. The 4G LTE launch was amazing as customers were able to get to up 40 Mbps (La, 2014).

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