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Discussion – Get off the Nose
A common criticism of dialogue is that it is “on the nose.” It states too clearly what the character is thinking without filtering the thoughts through the personality and conflict. Write four lines of dialogue for Ashley and Nick. Ashley is a 16 year old cheerleader and Nick is the 18 year old football quarterback. Ashley wants to say “I have a crush on you.” That would be on the nose. So write four to six lines of dialogue to accomplish that task.
Respond with a 50 word critique to one other person.
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Ashley: Hello Nick. That was a great performance today.
Nick: Thanks a lot. You know I have to try and keep improving. Maybe I could have a shot at a career in football.
Ashley: Glad. I wish you all the best. So, what are you doing this evening?
Nick: Thanks. I am catching up with the boys. It’s been a long while since we had some time off.
Ashley: I bet it will offer you an opportunity to cool off. I have been watching you in training and I must admit, you looked great.
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