message feedback

reading and composing a message to provide feedback

message should be around 2-3 paragraphs. ( 350 – 500 words)

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First, read this email message from John Jones. (file upload below)

After reading John’s inquiry, compose a message — “Dear John…” — to provide feedback with the purpose of helping him improve. Please comment on what he has done adequately, before pointing out areas he needs to revise to fit his audience and purpose more effectively. You do not have to point out every flaw, but you need to mention the major areas of concern, and explain why they are of concern. Be specific and reference at least one supporting point from the Bovée and Thill text. Please proofread your message before submitting.

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Inquiry feedback

Dear John,

Despite your letter of inquiry being direct and straight to the point of the inquiry, it could benefit from an improvement in the subject line. In particular, the subject line intends to create an impression on the audience, helping him or her understand the message intended in the letter (Bovee and Thrill 22).

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