Proposal Critique

“Proposal Critique”
In this assignment you will be rewriting and critiquing the proposal provided.

There are at least six improvements to be made in the document. Your

job is to identify the six improvements and then, using track changes,

rewrite or fix the error. Also, using the comments tool, give a brief

explanation to why it is wrong and why you fixed it the way you did.

Note: If your word processing program does not have track changes, you

will need to insert comments in brackets using red font at the

improvement location.

In your document, you should:

1. Identify at least six proposal weaknesses using track changes.
2. Include a critique paragraph of at least 150 words at the end of the document.
3. Discuss improvements for each of the weaknesses in your critique.
4. Ensure both the comments and critique are concise and error-free.

Your assignment must follow these formatting requirements:

• Be typed, double spaced, using Times New Roman font (size 12), with one-inch margins on all sides; references must follow APA or school-specific format. Check with your professor for any additional instructions.
• Include a cover page containing the title of the assignment, the student’s name, the professor’s name, the course title, and the date. The cover page and the reference page are not included in the required page length.

The specific course learning outcomes associated with this assignment are:

• Outline the strengths and opportunities for improvement of all communications.
• Revise draft documents to improve audience comprehension.
• Employ correct Edited Standard Written English (ESWE).
• Prepare proposals for technical products and/or services.
• Use technology and information resources to research issues in technical writing.
• Write clearly and concisely about technical writing using proper writing mechanics.

A Proposal

To:                         

From:                   

Date:                    

Subject:               Proposal for Plant Service

Problem and Solution

Mason Office Center is a lovely Georgian building containing four offices. However, the interior is not attractive or inviting for clients/customers and employees. The off-white walls throughout the complex seem dull and boring, adjectives the tenants do not want associated with their businesses. In addition, the air in the building is musty and unpleasant at times.

Green Thumb Planting can provide and maintain a beautiful plantscape in the building that will attract visitors and employees as well as purify the air and introduce more oxygen. Research shows that people respond positively to interiors with at least two plants per room. These changes can be made in an unobtrusive, cost-effective manner.

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