Causes of Increase in Divorce

Need assistance with making edits based on tutors response. Essay has been reviewed and revised by schools tutor and just need help applying the edits. All sources are already here, unless you want to add additional that you find valuable, and the comments/edits needed are short and specific.

The two main reason I chose to write about was: No-fault divorce law and cohabitation has become more acceptable. Therefore, I need someone to strengthen the points outlined here so that it is clear that they contribute to the rise in divorce rates.

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The first effect can work, but I think you can be more specific. What year exactly was the “no fault” introduced? Then, you can start to compare the numbers of before and after.

The second effect is good as well, yes. But again, specific will always win. How much higher is the divorce rate when people live together first?

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Divorce Rates Increase
To get married is the goal of all or the majority of intimate relationships. However, they seem to be a shift amongst our generation. Young adults no longer seem to be interested in marriage, and when they do get married, they easily get a divorce for different reasons. Some couples fight before they get a divorce while others do not. Some exhaust counseling, try separation, include other parties in their marriages, and when all fails, the result is divorce.

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